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中文普通话书写练习 (所有级别)

课程 101, 单元 1, 课程 1

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我的女朋友是美丽和甜的。她有美丽的眼睛和完善微笑。
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  • 小婕
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  • 小婕
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    chines very good !! are you chines ?
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  • Cindy
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    我的女朋友是美丽，恬静的。他有一双美丽的眼睛和友好的笑容
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  • winnie
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  • winnie
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    不知道你女朋友是穷还是富有,是肥还是瘦的身材呢?你好象没回答哦!
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  • 乖乖猪
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    “甜”alawys describes food.For example,“糖是甜的”. This word doesn't usually describe a person. "完善"and"微笑"can't use together,you can use "迷人的"."迷人的"means fancinating. I think this sentance can write like that. 我的女朋友是美丽的。她有美丽的眼睛和迷人的微笑。
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  • alice
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    很好.但似乎"完善"不能和"微笑"搭配.或许可以将"完善"改为 友善 或 甜美.
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  • lily
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    my answer:我的女朋友是美丽和甜美的。她有美丽的眼睛和迷人的微笑。 your essay is very well,because i can see your meaning.but you use some words is not very well.fristli, 甜，it is "sweet" in english."sweet" is none,adj in english,so we can use english say:the gril is sweet.but 甜 is only taste in china.for example,i don't like cake ,because it is so sweet.then you want to use chinese to say someone is sweet.you can use"甜美的＂.second,＂完善＂,it can not describe someone in chinese.the word can use:the facilities is very perfect in the room.so you can use ＂迷人的＂to describe someone.it maybe is"charming" in enghlish.
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  • kimi
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    Does not need front to look these person's evaluation, your <甜> word has been using very standard, also is very wise, in China described when girl or petite woman, uses <甜> is extremely extremely appropriate. If you use <甜美>, can be called others to think the expression feels too officially uncomfortable, therefore uses <甜> to be extremely correct. Uses <完善> as for you to describe the smile is not correct, you may use <甜美> this word to describe the smile. For example: 我的女朋友很漂亮,她有美丽的眼睛和甜美的微笑. OR 我的女朋友很甜. In China, no matter is the speech, writes, all must avoid the identical adjective appearance as far as possible in a paragraph, therefore, if your first speech used <美丽> this word, then you in behind several descriptions, had to use its synonym as far as possible, for example <漂亮>, did this may avoid the words tasteless. For example: 她很美,你看她漂亮的眼睛. OR 他很高,你看他修长的身材. Long-term usage same adjective in grammar not wrong, only is we must avoid as far as possible. This may enable our language to have the appreciation.
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  • Chynna
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    Congratulation! You did a very good job as a beginner, who only learned Lesson One! It is so amazing that you use Chinese adjective phrases at the low-intermediate level. 1.This topic is based on the vocabulary and sentence patterns in Unit 1-1 and 2. (subject+be/adj.) 2. You use them to write about the topic in Chinese characters. 3. You also enhance your learning by using the sentence pattern, "subject +be+adj.+de" and "have 有” perfectly。 4. Your writing is concise, fluent, beautiful and comprehensible. Your basic structures are great. The only thing is the accurate use of adj. phrases （Rhetoric), which is far beyond your beginning literal level. All of the other comments and suggestions are valuable for your reconsideration. I will summarize them in figurative language for you in another comment. Thank you so much for the great work. Please keep it up. Best wishes to you！非常好! 您能用汉语文字清楚地表达熟悉的意思。您能在熟悉的题目下用课内的知识，创造中文句子。您使用的课文的句型和词汇很正确。 在课内知识基础上，您学习了其他的中文表达法，丰富了您的汉语知识。非常感谢您。继续努力！我为您祝福！
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  • ziseyangguang
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    you may say "完美“微笑！you may mean that your girlfriend is sweet?in chinese,we say "甜美的”not甜的。but I think your chinese is wonderful!can we learn from each other?
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    我的女朋友是美丽的,她有一双美丽的眼睛和甜美的微笑.
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  • Chynna
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    The list of the adjective phrases with explanations and examples: 美丽 beautiful * 美丽的小姑娘 ：a pretty little girl * 十分美丽 : very beautiful * 美丽动人 : a moving beauty * 山河美丽 : a country beauty * 美丽的心灵 : a beautiful mind * 美丽的花朵 : a pretty flower 漂亮 handsome; good-looking; pretty; beautiful; smart;lovely * 漂亮的小伙子 : a handsome young man * 漂亮的小姑娘 : a pretty little girl * 漂亮的花：a beautiful flower 恬静 quiet; peaceful; tranquil * 她的歌声淳美恬静 Her pure, sweet and tranquil singing 友好 kind, friendly; amicable *他们都对我十分友好 They are very nice to me 笑容 smile * 她的笑容妩媚动人。Her smile is lovely; charming 微笑 smile * 嫣然微笑 : to smile sweetly 迷人 charming; fascinating; enchanting; bewitching; cute; winning; magic; magical * 美丽迷人 : a charming beauty * 迷人的风光 : a charming scene * 迷人的眼睛 : charming eyes 完美 perfect; consummate; immaculate * 追求完美 : to seek perfection *完美无缺 : to leave nothing to be desired *几近完美 : to approach perfection * 品质完美 : of perfect quality 完善 perfect; consummate *设备完善 : very well equipped *完善基础设施 : to improve the infrastructure *完善管理制度 : to improve the system of management * 进一步完善 : to further improve something *清理完善 : to check something up and improve it
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  • Chynna
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    There is the further research about 甜美 and 甜. Both of them have a literal meaning and have the use of figurative speech. As a metaphor, both of them can be used to describe a woman, smile, word, characters... 甜美 1. sweet; luscious * 味道甜美 : taste sweet; have a sweet taste * 甜美多汁的桃儿 : luscious and juicy peaches 2. pleasant; refreshing（metaphor) * 甜美的生活 : a happy life * 睡了个甜美的午觉 : have a refreshing nap * 一个甜美的梦。pleasant dream * 甜美的音乐。pleasant music * 甜美的笑容.pleasant smile 甜 , tián 形 adj。 1 (指 味 道 taste) sweet 2 (指 睡 觉 sleep) sound 3 (喻 metaphor) (幸 福,愉快，宜人) happy, pleasant Metaphor: implied comparison achieved through a figurative use of words; the word is used not in its literal sense, but in one analogous to it. 女孩很甜。 她很甜也很骚 她笑得很甜 很甜的声音 她很甜 嘴巴很甜 我说她很甜很美吧 他觉得他一直很甜
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  • Chynna
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    女孩很甜。 她很甜也很骚 The articles in Google use 甜 to describe person, quality, smile, words... 她笑得很甜 She smiled sweetly. 很甜的声音 sweet voice 她很甜 She is sweet. 嘴巴很甜 Her month is sweet. 我说她很甜很美吧 I say that she is sweet and pretty. 他觉得他一直很甜 He feel he is still sweet.
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  • Chynna
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    My tutoring philosophy is that I provide the research materials to you. You as an author have the own right to decide the accurate phrases for your friend. This is your creation at your present Chinese level. You are not a native speaker and not perfect. But, you know your friend. You are also experiencing and enjoy the learning process. If you let us know your choice, it will be great!
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    我的女朋友是美丽和甜的。她有美丽的眼睛和完善微笑。 --:我的女朋友美麗又(可愛)-她有美麗的眼睛和迷人的微笑
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  • 东方若汐
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    　　汉语中形容词用在句子末尾是一般不加"的",还有就是"是"这个字的问题,中国人学英语或外国人学汉语都有各自的疑惑,英语"My girlfriend is beautyful and sweet"直接写成汉语就是你写的那样．不过汉语的习惯很多情况下把＂是＂字省略了，你可以说："我的女朋友很甜美"．＂美丽＂和＂甜＂可以说成＂甜美＂ 　　"beautyful eyes "形容得很好．＂perfect smile"可以加个＂的＂　＂完善的微笑＂
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    微笑似乎不能用完善去修饰，用迷人比较好。
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    OMG I WISH I COULD UNDERSTAND THIS HAHA .... JUST WANTED TO SAY HI TAKE CARE SO MUCH SHAWN! KISSES BYE BYE
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    我有一个美丽可爱的女朋友，她有一双美丽的眼睛，她的笑容美极了。
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  • luolingling
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    我的女朋友是个甜美的女孩,她有一双美丽的眼睛和甜美的笑容. 我希望和你成为学习上的朋友, l help you with your chinese you help me with my english
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  • bingo
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    微笑用完善来形容不大好，可以用“甜美的”微笑，“我的女朋友是美丽和甜的”可以把“是”改为“很”，“的”去掉听起来会好点。改为“我的女朋友很美丽和甜。他有美丽的眼睛和甜美的微笑”就very good!
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  • Wu Jie
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    "完善"用的不合适.
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    我的女朋友非常美丽。她有美丽的眼睛和甜美的笑容。
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    我的女朋友很漂亮，她有美丽的大眼睛和甜蜜的微笑。
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    我的女朋友是美丽和甜的。她有美丽的眼睛和完善微笑

    Great job! I wonder if you have been China. However, you cannot use sweet in Chinese when you describe people. You can use 平和，温和，和平，和气，or 贤惠。In addition, you had better use &ldquo;的” infront of 微笑.

    Correction: 我的女朋友又美丽又贤惠。她有美丽的眼睛和完善的微笑。

    又&hellip;&hellip;又&hellip;&hellip;means "and, also".  For example,她又美丽又可爱。She is beautiful and cute.

    You really did GREAT JOB!!!
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