形容你的街道
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透过你家窗户观察并描述街道上的动静。行人和车辆都在往哪个方向流动？客人怎么从街道走到你家？
英语书写练习 (所有级别)
课程 201, 单元 7, 课程 2
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Hi there!
My favorite restaurant is called Peixinhos (Little Fishes), actually it's a bar-restaurant that works day and night (not 24 hours) and it's always full, no vacancy. The people have to wait some minutes to eat there.. hehehe
This restaurant is next to my home, on a near neighborhood. Well, next if I go by car, but I can't go walking on the streets for hours... I'm a biking fan, not a walking one.
I just went there once, but I love it. It's not pretty expensive, the attendants (employees) are great and I love fish! Actually, I don't know the reason I didn't back there. Well, I need to!
Crossing the street there is a nice little square with some trees. But the street is a little bit desert; not the traffic, because everytime there are cars passing through the street (or is it an avenue? I don't remmeber), but there isn't more trades or shops, just houses and an abandoned, helpless, unused field. Poor field...
Thanks! :)
My favorite restaurant is called Peixinhos (Little Fishes), actually it's a bar-restaurant that works day and night (not 24 hours) and it's always full, no vacancy. The people have to wait some minutes to eat there.. hehehe
This restaurant is next to my home, on a near neighborhood. Well, next if I go by car, but I can't go walking on the streets for hours... I'm a biking fan, not a walking one.
I just went there once, but I love it. It's not pretty expensive, the attendants (employees) are great and I love fish! Actually, I don't know the reason I didn't back there. Well, I need to!
Crossing the street there is a nice little square with some trees. But the street is a little bit desert; not the traffic, because everytime there are cars passing through the street (or is it an avenue? I don't remmeber), but there isn't more trades or shops, just houses and an abandoned, helpless, unused field. Poor field...
Thanks! :)
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Hi Niara,
I like your new pic! :)
You have a nice friendly writing style. However, here are a few suggestions to make this exercise read better:
Hi there! My favorite restaurant is called Peixinhos (Little Fishes). Actually it's a bar-restaurant that works day and night (not 24 hours) and it's always full, no vacancy. The people have to wait for some time to eat there.. hehehe This restaurant is next to my home, in a nearby neighborhood. Well, next door if I go by car, but I can't go walking on the streets for hours... I'm a biking fan, not a walking one. I just went there once, but I love it. It's not very expensive, the attendants (employees) are great and I love fish! Actually, I don't know the reason I didn't go back there. Well, I need to! Crossing the street there is a nice little square with some trees. But the street is a little bit deserted; not the traffic, because everytime there are cars passing through the street (or is it an avenue? I don't rememeber), but there isn't more trades or shops, just houses and an abandoned, helpless, unused field. Poor field... Thanks! :)
Hi there! My favorite restaurant is called Peixinhos (Little Fishes). Actually it's a bar-restaurant that works day and night (not 24 hours) and it's always full, no vacancy.(This is not necessary and it is used for hotels) The people have to wait some minutes to eat there.. hehehe This restaurant is next to near my home, in a nearby neighborhood. Well, next near if I go by car, but I can't go walking on the streets for hours... I'm a biking fan, not rather than a walking one fan. I just went there once, but I love it. It's not pretty particularly expensive, the attendants (employees) waiters and waitresses are great and I love fish! Actually, I don't know the reason why I didn't have not gone back there. Well, I need to! Crossing Across the street there is a nice little square with some trees. But the street is a little bit deserted; not the traffic, because everytime there are cars passing through the street with very little through traffic (or is it an avenue? I don't remember). but There isn't more are no other trades businesses or shops there, just houses and an abandoned, helpless, unused field. Poor field... Thanks! :
"helpless" is generally used to describe people.
A good exercise.
Rich and Graham, thanks so much for the corrections, friend! :)
I wish you an amazing week!
Greetings!
Rich and Graham have given you very good and generous help.
Thanks for reviewing, Wlc! :)
Good week!!!
Good work! Agree with rich!!
Thanks, Ajou! :)
Hi there! My favorite restaurant is called Peixinhos (Little Fishes), actually it's a bar-restaurant that works [is open] day and night (not 24 hours) and it's always full, no vacancy. The people have to wait some [several] minutes to eat there.. hehehe This restaurant is next to my home, on [in] a [nearby] neighborhood. Well, next [near] if I go by car, but I can't go walking on the streets for hours... I'm a biking fan, not a walking one. I just went there [just] once, but I love it. It's not pretty [very] expensive ('pretty' in this sense only works for positives), the attendants (waiters/waitresses) (employees) (staff) are great and I love fish! Actually, I don't know the reason I didn't [haven't gone] back there. Well, I need to! Crossing [Across] the street there is a nice little square with some trees. But the street is a little bit desert[ed]; not the traffic, because everytime [I go there] there are cars passing through the street, but there isn't more trades or [aren't many businesses or] shops, just houses and an abandoned, helpless, unused field. Poor field... Thanks! :)
Hi Niara,I hope you are doing well ,about you writing exercise ,there are some changes that I would make to sound more like an English speaker. Introductions are very important. I would have said, Hello my name is Niara,please review my writing exercise.
My favorite restaurant is peixinhos.Actually it is combination bar and restaurant that works from early morning until late each night.Because of the great food and customer service people that want to eat there sometimes have to wait long periods of time before a table becomes available.
This restaurant is in a nearby neighborhood if traveling by car.Since I can not walk for hours,I sometimes ride my bicycle because I love to ride a bicycle.
I have been there only once but I would recommend this restaurant to all my friends. It is not very expensive and the staff gives excellent service and I love the food. I don't know why I haven't gone there but I must go soon.
Across the street I saw the town square,which was beautifully decorated with trees and many flowers in full bloom. Since this was the only business on that street,there were very few people out walking but the streets were very crowed with traffic. One thing I did notice was an abandoned field.
Hello, Gilgy and Steve!
Thanks for your help! It's important for me...
Nice week!
Excellent english, as always. I made a few minor corrections. It is a very interesting paragraph. It write like a native.
The bar is "open" day and night. "No vacancy" is usually used for rooms at a hotel. People usually have to wait to eat there. This resturant is next to my home in a nearby neighborhood.
Well, next if I go by car, but I can't go walking on the streets for hours... ? Do you mean.... I go by car because I can't go walking on the streets after hours.
It's not expensive. ....why I didn't go back there. Across the street, is a nice little square with some trees.
But the street is a little bit deserted; not the traffic, because there are always cars passing through the street (or is it an avenue? I don't remmeber). But there aren't more businesses or shops, just houses and an abandoned, helpless, unused field. Poor field... Thanks! :)
Hey, my dear Blair!!! :)
Thank you!
And about you, man?! When you'll write other text, hun???
I'm an evil teacher! hehe
Very good