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Last weekend I went to the mall for shopping new clothes. As you know every woman loves buy clothes, shoes, including jewelry, perfume, handbags, belts......:) While I was in the mall I spent time shopping some dresses for me. Course I chose the sexiest of the store. That´s because I like wear different dresses in the summer and it is coming soon. I'm getting ready! My friend was with me. She is named Daniela. On the end we enjoyed to skate int the nice. What party! I bought new dresses and felt down in the ice. hahahaha.....;))
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Last weekend I went to the mall for shopping [to shop for] new clothes. As you know[,] every woman loves [to] buy clothes, [including] shoes, including jewelry, perfume, handbags, belts......:) While I was in [at] the mall I spent time shopping [for] some dresses for me [myself]. [']Course ('Course is slang. Normally it's 'of course') I chose the sexiest of [in] the store. That´s because I like [to] wear different dresses in the summer and it is coming soon. I'm getting ready! My friend was with me. She is named [Her name is] Daniela. On [At] the end we enjoyed to skate [ice skating] int the nice (or 'skating on thin ice'? A bad idea!) What [a]party! I bought new dresses and felt [fell] down in [on] the ice. hahahaha.....;))
As you know every woman to loves buy clothes, shoes, jewelry, perfume, handbags, belts and ...
Of course I chose the sexiest one in the store.
That´s because I like wear different dresses in the summer which is coming soon.
Her is named Daniela.
At the end we enjoyed skating at the ice platform.
Good job.
every woman loves buying clothes/ to buy clothes
That is because i like wearing different dresses during the summer which is coming soon.
At the end, we enjoyed...
What a party!!!
good work!
Good submission .
Kindly follow the comments of Mr.Gilgy
TO SHOP FOR.
HER NAME IS DANIELA.
Good but be careful with the verbs = )
Thanks dear friends!
Really I did a bad text! I made many mistakes and I didnt care about grammar and words.. My bad!
BTW I'm happy to see many people care about my works ´cuz I have made many reviews too.
If you need help in Portuguese don´t be shy. Ask me. :)
Good...
I agree with Mr.Gilgy.
good.
I agree completly with Gilgy!
It's a good text. There are few mistakes.
Try again!
Good luck!
Cristiane, keep on smiling, nothing to worry, thanks for the effort and courage you have shown.
Why every women likes shopping,no matter where she is from?
Cristiane, great job! I see all the corrections down below. Have a nice day! :D
Last weekend I went to the mall for shopping new clothes. As you know that every woman loves buy clothes, shoes, including jewelry, perfume, handbags, belts......:) While I was at the mall I spent time for shopping some dresses for myself. of course I chose the sexiest one in the store. Because of I like to wear different dresses in the summer and it is coming soon. I'm getting ready! My friend was with me. Her name is Daniela. At the end we enjoyed skating on the ice. What a party! I bought new dresses and fell down on the ice. hahahaha.....;))
It is good but you do better.
Bye.
What surprise Hein!
Shooping / Women
Clothes / Women
Shoes / Women
and like you just wtitten "including" jewlry, perfume, handbags, belts ..... (rss);]
Well it's a really good submission!
Well Done
I wich to you nice time
^_^
Muito bem minha kisy, but I didn't know about your love for shopping and the ice skating lol. anyway, i don't think i can add more than to what Gilgy wrote, just pay attention to your mistakes. And i wish to see you write like this in arabic :))
I agree with Mr Bora Gur.
Have a good time.
Good كريستاني