我的工作
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运用本课词汇形容你的工作。你做什么？你喜欢自己做的事情吗？你在这个领域工作多长时间了？你想一直做这份工作吗？
英语书写练习 (所有级别)
课程 202, 单元 10, 课程 3
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I worked in a local construction company in Kuala Lumpur for almost five years. It has about 400 employees which most of the employees are renewal contract staff including me. Usually the contract is renewed for two years basis except for the certain employees are based on completing of the projects. I worked in the account department and there are almost 40 staffs in the department. My responsibilities are to ensure the financial reports are completed as per dateline and to ensure that the payments to the creditors are processed promptly as per credit terms. I like what I am doing now because this is truly my ambition to work in the accounting field. I have been working in this field since from my first job that was about twelve years ago. I always want and enjoy working in this field and so far I never think to change it to other fields. Even my younger brother and younger sister are also involved in this field.
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I could correct a few errors but this is very good writing and know you are studying very hard.I am very proud of you1
Great job!
I worked in a local construction company in Kuala Lumpur for almost five years. It has about 400 employees, most of whom which most of the employees are renewal contract staff including me. Usually the contract is renewed for on an every two-years basis, except for the certain employees whose merit is are based on completion of the projects. I worked in the accounting department, and there are almost 40 staffs members in the department. My responsibilities are to ensure that the financial reports are completed as per dateline by the deadline and to ensure that the payments to the creditors are processed promptly as per credit terms. I like what I am doing now because this is truly my ambition to work in the accounting field. I have been working in this field since from my first job that was about twelve years ago. I always want and enjoy working in this field, and so far I have never think to change considered changing it to other fields. [This changes it to past tense and makes more sense.] Even my younger brother and younger sister are also involved in this field.
Good work! I have left a few suggestions. Let me know of your doubts. Keep going! \o/
Good work, good suggestions already made.
I see the corrections have been made. May I suggest just one correction?
"I have been working in this field since from my..." The word 'from' is unnecessary. I'm not sure what you mean by "I always want and enjoy...". It's better to remove 'want and'. Well done.
I have worked in a local construction company in Kuala Lumpur for almost five years. It has about 400 employees which most of whom the employees are renewal contract staff, including me. Usually the contract is renewed for on a two years basis except for the certain employees whose contracts are based on completing of the projects. I worked in the account department and there are almost 40 staffs in that department. My responsibilities are to ensure the financial reports are completed as per dateline and to ensure that the payments to the creditors are processed promptly as per credit terms. I like what I am doing now because this is truly my ambition to work in the accounting field. I have been working in this field since from my first job (that) which began was about twelve years ago. I always want to work and enjoy working in this field and, so far, I have never think to thought of changing it to for another fields. Even my younger brother and younger sister are also involved in this field.
You are mixing past ans present in a confusing way.
You cannot use and "want" and "enjoy" together as one is followed by an infinitive and the other by a gerund.
A really ambitious text once again. Keep up the good work.
This is a very good writing attempt. I assume that you are still working for the company. That is the reason I have used the present tense. You started your writing using the past tense, but you switch to the present tense. This is an admirable attempt at writing, and you have done rather well.
I have worked in a local construction company in Kuala Lumpur for almost five years. It has there are about 400 employees who which most of the employees are renewal-contract staff which includes me.including me. Usually the contract is renewed for every two years basis except for the certain employees whose earnings are based on completion of their assigned projects. I have worked in the accounts or (accounting) department and where there are almost 40 employees staffs in the department. My responsibilities are to ensure that the financial reports are completed as per dateline on time and to ensure that the payments to the creditors are processed promptly. as per credit terms. I like what I am doing now because it is truly my ambition to work in the accounting field. I have been working in this field since from my first job that was about twelve years ago. I will always want and enjoy working in this field; and so far, I have never considered changingd think to change it to another field. Even my younger brother and younger sister are also involved in this field. // <![CDATA[//
I have worked in a local construction company in Kuala Lumpur for almost five years. It has about 400 employees which most of the employees are renewable contract staff, including me. Usually the contract is renewed on a two years basis except for the certain employees who are based on completion of the projects. I worked in the accounting department and there are almost 40 staff members in the department. My responsibilities are to ensure the financial reports are completed as per dateline (deadline) and to ensure that the payments to the creditors are processed promptly as per credit terms. I like what I am doing now because this is truly my ambition to work in the accounting field. I have been working in this field since from my first job which was about twelve years ago. I always want and enjoy working in this field and so far I never thought of changing it to another fields. Even my younger brother and younger sister are also involved in this field.
First, let me say, EXCELLENT! Very well said and with minimal errors for the volume of the work. Most of the corrections were to clarify your meaning rather than bad errors. I understood perfectly what you were trying to say. Great job.