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英语书写练习 (所有级别)
课程 202, 单元 9, 课程 5
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Last vacation...mmm...this winter to the mountains for 3 days...only :(, with some friend. Was a place close to Rome called Pescasseroli. Was nice, we were there skiing...and having fun. The most I like the little house or motel we slept in. Was warm, little and clean rooms, nice people. Very close to the mountain. Practically in the midle of no where. Long walks into the evening, nice restaurants for lunch and dinner, good friends, and nature. What else can anybody want. Thx.
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My last vacation was in Paris, last year. It was not that long..just for one week, it's true, but the experience was amazing. All they say is true, i mean it's the most romantic city I have ever seen. A big city without traffic because of the 14 metro lines, 12 or 14 i don't remember it correctly. If you ever visit Paris do it the at night also, u will find singers on the corners of the streets..just like we see them in the movies, and Notre Dame or the Eiffel tower in the at night are nicelly light up. Oh, don't forget the Louvre Museum, i needed two days to visit it all. And of course, i was to Disney also..no wonder the children are happy there!! It's a bit expensive, it's true, but worths every penny i spend. Thank you
My last vacation was in Paris, last year. It was not that long..just for one week, it's true, but the experience was amazing. All they say is true, i mean it's the most romantic city I have ever seen. It is a big city without traffic because of the having ( or ... because there are....)14 metro lines, 12 or 14 i don't remember it correctly. If you ever visit Paris do it the at night also, u will find singers on at the corners of the streets..just like we see them in the movies, and Notre Dame or the Eiffel tower in the at night are nicelly light up. Oh, don't forget the Louvre Museum, i needed two days to visit it all. And of course, i was went to Disney also..no wonder the children are happy there!! It's a bit expensive, it's true, but it worths every penny i spend. Thank you
very good !!! dont forget that in english every sentence starts with a subject. :)
Very nicely done, Mirela! I love Paris myself. :-)
A few points:
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- Avoid "run on sentences"; begin a new sentence any time the subject changes. If you are writing about different, but related ideas, you can separate the sentences with a semi-colon. For example: "All they say is true; Paris is the most romantic city I've ever seen."
- You don't need phrases like "I mean" or "it's true". People will assume the thoughts are yours because you have done the writing. :-)
My last vacation was last year in Paris, last year. It was not that long, just for one week, it's true, but the experience was amazing. All they say is true; I mean it's the most romantic city I've ever seen. It's a big city without traffic because of the 14 metro lines -- 12 or 14, I don't remember it correctly exactly. If you ever visit Paris do it the see the city at night also too. You will find singers on the corners of the streets, just like we see them in the movies. and In addition, Notre Dame or and the Eiffel Tower in the night are nicelly light up lit. Oh, don't forget the Louvre Museum. I needed two days to visit it all. And of course, I was also to at Disney; also no wonder the children are happy there!! It's a bit expensive, it's true, but worths every penny I spend spent.
My last vacation was in Paris, last year. It was not that long, just for one week, it's true, but the experience was amazing! All they have said is true, about it being the most romantic city I have ever seen! A big city without traffic jams because of the 14 metro lines (12 or 14, I don't remember it correctly). If you ever visit Paris, do so at night also, because you will find singers in the corners of the streets, just like we see them in the movies, and Notre Dame and the Eiffel Tower, in the night are nicely lit up. Oh, don't forget the Louvre Museum, too, I needed two days to visit it all, and of course ('of' and 'course' separated), I also went to Disneyland (or, Disney's) - no wonder the children are happy there!! It's a bit expensive, it's true, but worth every penny I spent!
Hey remember I sent you Indian movie song shooted in paris (venice lake).Have u ever been there?
You described the Paris wonderfully....here r some corrections I made:-
My last vacation was in Paris, last year. It was not that long, just for one week, but the experience was amazing. All they say is true, it's the most romantic city I have ever seen. It's a big city without traffic because of the 14 metro lines, 12 or 14 i don't remember exactly. If you ever visit Paris see the city at night also, u will find singers on the corners of the streets,just like we see them in the movies;Notre Dame or the Eiffel tower in the night are nicelly lit up. Oh, don't forget the Louvre Museum, I spent two days to visit it all.And ofcourse, I went to Disney also no wonder the children are happy there.It was a bit expensive, but it worths each penny I spent.Thank you
it seemsto me that you spend amazing time there, and you will try it again.
anyway you are doing good, there is a lot of comments, i cannot add anymore otherwise you will be confused.
best regards
My last vacation was in Paris, last year. It was not long, just for one week. It was short but the experience was amazing. What I heard about Paris is true, I mean it's the most romantic city I've ever seen. A big city without traffic thanks to the 14 (or 12 whichever is correct) metro lines. If you will ever visit Paris do it at night. You will find singers on the street corners exactly like we see them in movies, Notre Dame or the Eiffel tower. The night is nicelly lit up. Oh, don't forget the Louvre Museum. I needed two days to see it all. And of course, I also went to Disney. No wonder the children are happy there! It's a bit expensive, but worths every penny I spent. Thank you
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